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Tyche

I absolutely love this!!!! the story without explaining is a little unclear though

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Final Story

the drawings could use a little work but the music was great!

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Wyoming

... ............. <----- my feedback (also the VoiceOver was beautiful XD)

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The Magic of Music

I love the idea and story! I think the frames are a bit repetitive though :D

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Achromatic World

love the story, would like some more dialogue :D

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Kara Final Video

I love the color consistency and the story, It was a little hard to understand how she felt about the cookies though, did she freak out a little when she saw the box? how did she react at first when eating the cookies?

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Bully Dog Act 1

I love the art style! I think you should go into more detail on how or why the janitor is a witch, that came out of nowhere!

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PO’s World

I love your story so much (and your art) but I don't have enough time to give good feedback so I wanna say I love the story!!

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In The Mirror

I love the reflections and the darkness of the room, I think you should contrast the character slightly, maybe make her darker or lighter than the rest of the room? I love that she has a unique outline with her backpack and hair, it makes for really good recognition when you see her from other angles!

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Setting

I love the gloomy atmosphere of the drawing and the pop of color in the hoodie, I would suggest making the rest of the scene darker other than the empty swing and the city! I also think the pose is very in-between, its not relaxed or tense, I would suggest bringing one of the characters legs upwards a bit since they look like they're slipping off the swing slightly. also you could make the hoodie look grayer and more colorless the closer it is to the other swing!

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Moony entering the forest

I love the shading and the unwelcome feeling of kind of peering through the trees as the perspective, I think maybe she should be backlit, maybe some rim lighting added to her back so you know that her as a whole is leaving whatever safe-haven place is before the forest. I also would suggest exaggerating her expression slightly more, maybe tilting an eyebrow or an eye, bringing a shoulder or both shoulders up to convey uneasiness, but I absolutely adore the character design :D

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george and her radio

I love how she's kind of crouched in the room and the color scheme is pretty mute so you focus more on the darker lineart of George! I would love to see just a small but significant pop of color among the brown and gray maybe on an item or part of the room more important than the background?

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What to Choose?

I think the setting here is really important, the big boxy towering buildings in the background versus the flow of the tree and the cat, you can also see how torn the character is between the cat and the other character! I think you could add a bit more emphasis on the girl and the cat, maybe make their lines a bit darker than everything else?

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Week 2 character profile

a plant scientist ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

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Character Profile

I love her recognizable features but I really want to hear more of her story, what made her so hot tempered all the time? how has this affected other relationships if she has any?

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Week 2

I loved her character design and how the different expressions you drew her in show her personality, I would love a little more conflict and id like to know how she got injured, does she get injured often?

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Character Profile- Lux

I love this one! I want to know how he would defend the village, does he have some sort of power other than his visual glow?

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Julio

I love the expressions and I love the story :D

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Meet Po!

I want to know the original reason for his love for cupcakes, But I love the story!!!

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Alexis cute

I don't really know what's going on (but I love the character design)

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