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Cornelius - Act One

I love this story so far! I feel bad for Cornelius - helped a lot of others yet it seems they only wanted to hang around him because he had a unique color. I wonder, did his color disappear because he kept helping others or did it naturally fade? Either way, I can't wait to see what happens next!

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Story spine

I absolutely love the moral of your story as it resonates with me a lot. And I also love the drawing of the creature and his general chaotic nature haha. Nothing felt confusing and I look forward to this!

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Story spine

I absolutely love the moral of your story as it resonates with me a lot. And I also love the drawing of the creature and his general chaotic nature haha. Nothing felt confusing and I look forward to this!

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Kyota's Story Spine

Love the concept. One thing I was confused by was what makes Kyota more careful and Adrien more daring? What happened in which Kyota learned his lesson that sometimes you need to be careful or it will get you into trouble? And adversely, what happened to make Kyota believe that taking risks could benefit him? I think clarifying that, or having a moment where both characters learn that lesson could make this story stronger!

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Cian and the Metaverse

I love the story! It feels very cyberpunk-ish which I love. I wonder what specifically makes the Metaverse easier, better & more fun than the real world? Is the metaverse similar to how we live our lives currently with internet and cars? Or is the metaverse more advanced than that? Also I wonder how Cian is able to find food/sustain himself and if he would get lonely being the only person not connected to a machine?

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Week 4

Hey Team 50/50! I love the story so far and what a great moral. You could even say the moral of the story is not to change yourself for others and that if you keep strong in your personal morals, people will see that. I also wondered-- what was the other person up for election doing while Mr. Schnee was being more lenient with the rules? Perhaps there could be a scene where the opponent even tells Mr. Schnee that he's taken it too far and the city will be in shambles because of him. Good luck with this! It's going great.

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Story Spine

I like the basic outline and idea of your story! I wonder what her dream is? Does it have something to do with being a farmer since she's a farm girl or is farming not actually her passion and she wants to do something else? One suggestion I have that could make this story stronger is going with the idea that not only does her failure in act 2 make it harder to accomplish her goal but perhaps her family isn't supportive of what she wants to do. This could manifest inside of her into thoughts like "What if I fail?" and that mindset could be the catalyst to her failure. Looking forward to see where you go with this!

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Week 4 - The Story Spine

I love the artwork and the moral of the story! I could also see a second moral being told where W doesn't have to be what other's want them to be-- but to be able to be what she wants to be in the end :)

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Aspen on the Borderline in the Woods

I love the setting and the sunset in the background! I also love the cabin peeking out in the darker part of the woods. It's great contrast! One thing I was confused about is the description in relation to the picture. Is the shadow-y figure in the background Aspen's friend? To me they look a little frightened, as if they're hiding from the shadow. I think making this clearer would make it a stronger piece!

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Death’s Offering

I love the death character! I think he's super cool. The one thing I found confusing is how it shows that Dr. Maya is giving her candle to her patient's candle? I wonder if that could be shown in the image somehow as well. One suggestion I have is making Dr. Maya's expression more clear! I'm not sure what emotion she is feeling in the current picture, but if she's using her candle to save a patient I imagine she would maybe be happy, hopeful, or determined.

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Globe City

I like how you can tell it's a city by the use of blocks! I wondered if there's a way to make it more clear that the city is inside a snow globe? Maybe having a view of the outside of the globe? I think you could make it stronger by switching the colors of the green building and the brown one, since the main character kind of blends in with the brown building since his shirt is brown as well. If you put him against a different color background he would stick out more :)

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"What Did You Do!?!"

I like the use of color and the style! I didn't find anything particularly unclear, but a suggestion I have is if you made the potion spirits brighter and more transparent it might look even cooler!

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The New Kid

I like the style! And I love the way you draw eyes.
I wondered what is the invisible character holding? Is it a picture frame? A mirror?

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Leo finds a Heart

I love the perspective and the use of warm colors to light up the picture!
I wondered what are the things holding the heart in place?
I think if you made the shadows darker in the picture, the heart would stand out even more, and it could make it more atmospheric.

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Character profile

I like how Jamie is a guitarist! I wonder what made her want to learn guitar in the first place? I also suggest having a goal/dream could chase to push her to want to practice more. Maybe an upcoming talent show or auditions to be in a band?

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Lola the Hummingbird

I love the idea that Lola sort of 'absorbs' the negative energy/emotion from the children! I wonder how this energy gets transferred to her and when she needs the help, I wonder how she'll express how she can't do this alone?

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Week 2

I like how Mr. Schnee wants approval from the people! I think that'll lead to really interesting character development. I wonder if Mr. Schnee is the only one who knows the "truth" of the city? If the rest of the townspeople were oblivious I wonder if Mr. Schnee would tell the people or keep it a secret to avoid panic? Nice work!

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Omen, The Black Cat

I like that the character is a cat! I love black cats especially. I wonder how the guardians cleanse humans? Is it with magical powers? I also wonder is there a sort of training/society of guardians that oversee what animals become guardians? Excited to see where this goes!

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S McIntyre - What if…?

These are super creative ideas, I love them all! My favorite one is the ghost antique shop. I wonder if the ghosts would want their antiques back. Would they steal them from the store? How is the store owner able to see the ghosts in the first place? If the item's belonged to the ghosts would the ghosts stop the owner from selling? Would the owner close down their shop?

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What If trailer -DCloud

I love the first what-if you have! It's very creative and I can see something magical happening with it. I wonder how a river could sing? What would it sound like- rushing water or an actual voice? I also wonder do humans live in this world and how would they be able to survive in it? Nothing was unclear to me!

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