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The Story of a Reptilian Vampire

I really like this character! he's really funny, but I do wonder why he was mean in the first place. I think that you should maybe put in some more drawings to help tell the story (like him getting lost in the hurricane I think would be a good scene that I can picture)

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Griffin, Willow, and Their Furniture ACT 3

I really like your drawings! Yes, I do want to know why their mother doesn't want them in the room (it is the living room after all, right?)

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Lil monster

I really like your artwork! It might just be on my end, but the sound is a bit low but overall, i really like your story!

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Week 7

I really like your story and detailed artwork! My only suggestion is to try to put in all 3 acts, as I was not sure what was going on since I haven't watched your other acts :D

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Story Reel 3

I really like the moral of the story and the drawings.
I notice that the beginning is repeated twice and at the end its black for a while ?
I also think that maybe you should put in some more details.
But overall I really like your story!

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Celeste’s Story Reel Act 1, 2 & 3

Thank you! I'll try to fix that too

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Week 4

I love the drawings and the idea of a girl becoming friends with a computer! I cant really hear your voice As much but overall i think its great!

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Week 4: Celeste's Story Spine

Thank you for the feedback! Ah yes, I like your ideas on why she dicded to stay with her Family. Ill try to make it more clear. Thank you!

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Terra's story spine

Hi! I really like the moral of the story (as I like talking to people too :D)I also really like your drawings, they are really cute! I'm wondering though, how does Terra's aunt have the power to curse her? Do they have like magic, or something else?

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Stella’s Spine Story

Hi, I really like this character! I love the moral of the story too! I'm just wondering, why does she grow spikes? She isn't like magical, is she? That as probably the only thing I found confusing/unclear

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Where Stella Is

I really like this picture! I really like the Carnival sign, and it's color! I think that maybe you can try to make Stella, since she's the main character, make her a bit bigger or maybe add some special color to her, just so that we can know that she's the main character! Overall though, I really like your drawing!

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Celeste's World!

Hi Ana, I was trying to draw that she was in a world with lots of elephants. THose little dots in the distances.. I was trying to make those look like elephants :D

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Setting

I really like your character. She's really cute. I can't really see much though, because the photo is sideways. My only suggestion for you though, besides flipping it right side up, I think that you can maybe add some more color to your picture. Or maybe you can add it just to your character, to add some pop so we know she's the main character.

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ghosties <3

I really like teh ghosts! They are super cute, and they look really dressed for vacation! One thing you could improve on is maybe to add some more color. Also, since they are going on vacation, maybe the sky should be like a light, sky blue so that you can really get the feel something "happy" is happening.

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Week 3

I really like your drawing style! I love how the mess looks hidden, but It's still there... It hasn't disappeared. I think maybe next time you can add some more color except for the blue. I also really like the perspective. :D

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Week Three Deliverable

I really like all of the light colors on the fish! I really like how you drew The octopus's expression. It looks really like he's mean and evil. I think that maybe you can make the background look more clear(Maybe add some more small fish or something) so that it's more clear that we are in the ocean. I can assume that we are, but It might make it even more clear. Overall, I really like your picture! You can maybe also add something else that makes Bait pop a bit more, so that we know he's the main character.

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The quest for color.

I really like this photo! I really like all of the colors. They look really pretty.

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Stella

I really like this character! Stella looks really sweet and cute! I would probably suggest adding some more pictures(maybe like a photo of her friends leaving with kids?)

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Mia

Hi! I really like this idea! I wonder more about what she's been lied to about her job!
P.S love the name haha :)

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What If

Thanks!

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What If

I was thinking something like magic! :D

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Miscellaneous Pitches

I love this idea! I wonder what the dogs would do in power... And how they would make all the world's important Decisions!😱

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1 in a million

I like the last one. I think that there could be a lot of magical scenes and I can picture a great story! I wonder more about how the books fly? And all books in like the entire world? Or just like books in a certain book store?

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Grimoire

I LOVE your drawings! They are soo pretty! I love all of your questions, but I mostly like the first one. I wonder what kind of magical powers the book has...I can't really think of anything really unclear, but I do wonder more about how this person found the book with magical powers? Did they find it in the library? Or bought it in a book shop??

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What If - Mónica Juárez

My favorite what if question was definitely the third one! It makes me wonder more about what might happen if she lost her magical book and also how she got separated from her family.

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