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"HELLO"

Hello, very cool. There is so much internal tension within each character; plus similarities & differences between the characters... Love to see how these internal characteristics manifest into the plot. Seems like both could do a little bit of patience.

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Six Characters in Four Minutes

Wow!!! that was lot's to introduce in a short span. Like the use of musical theme to communicate a level of depth about each character. What is the obstacle... Nico's sleep? Is there an alternative meaning you are trying to build here... Nico is us and the family is all the TV /YouTube / take your pick channels... so enticing.

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What if...

Like the music add, gets you into the stoeeriieee :-) it is not clear what are Kylie-Ann strengths or positives -- what does she do to have other's around accept her? Is she an artist and the sketch book is the obstacle - it is not clear, hope the plot will clarify.

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Shay

Love birds and like the plot of movement and loss of bonds, can relate to the tension and what happens in us humans in the teenage years! Curious how the plot will evolve on Shay coming to terms with -- is there a special friend he is missing. What is Shay like on the inside?... on the outside is he like a "Blue Jay"

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Character Profile

Nice clean design... is there a hidden message with the sharp edges -- Is Toro a diamond in the rough? ... he just has to find that for himself. You also use some geological terms -- Igneous = coming from lava, being fiery. Do you plan to use this into Toro's character? Be interesting to see how you can play on science, emotions and society. Are sedimentary rocks -- the ones that are (o) pressed; will toro come and resuce one of them ? What will cause his change of heart?

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Luanna the Aqua Wuff

Like the super-power concept! What is the challenge -seems like Luanna does not know why humans and other dogs like (her/him/them??) How will they use it to overcome their challenge. I'm curious to know about it more. Is there a crab and human connection?

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