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Ice Oil

What was unclear for you? Did you read the summary?

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The Magic of Music

The story is very good and character progression was also done pretty well. I’m a little confused on what “The Silence”. More clarity on the entity might increase the tension and stakes these characters have to face.

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TJ's Ultimate Desire

The moral and art is very good but (in my opinion) the start wasn’t necessary. Bu it did bring some type of tension to the movie which was interesting.

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Week 8

I like the idea that took the story of the Oregon trail and put your own spin on it. Good story and conflict. Keep up the great work.

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Tales From the Amazon - the saga

I love the moral and story progression. It was little hard to follow but overall it was good

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Hannah's Story Reel

The art is very and their very great potential to expand the character. Great job

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Hunter

The art is very good but the storyline was a little difficult to follow though. I felt like too many things were happening, maybe focus on one superhero trope.

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Alex’s Shadow

The art is very pleasing to look at. I love the way you portrayed their shadow; and positivity from that. Overall very good. Recommend on elaborating on Alex’s character and what emotions they were scared of.

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Sharpie The pencil sharpener

Character building and story were clear. I was unclear of what the moral was though. Overall solid work.

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Weighted

The art is spectacular, It instantly drew me in with its eye catching visuals. Though the story is lacking clarity and character growth. Collin’s character growth happens in a instance with no internal conflict.

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The princes and the secret

The story is good but its hard to appreciate the story because of the computerized voice and the music. Overall it has good story.

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Peaches and the not-so-unfriendly Monster.

Love the moral and story progression. I can totally see young children loving this

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Ice Oil

Thank you

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Act 1, Act 2 and part of Act 3.

I love the art and the story is very interested. Can’t wait to see the final product.

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Earth's lament

It was good

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Finley's Story Acts 1,2, &3

It’s a good story, its one of the more grounded and relatable ones I’ve seen. It’s done really well

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Tristen and Brad PARTY Act 2

Thank You, In my final edition I hope its more clear to you

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Lily Act 1.

This is amazing, the use of animation and your knowledge on storyboarding is awesome. No complaints overall really good.

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Griffin, Willow, and Their Furniture Act 1

The art is very good but I don’t think every little detail needs to explained though. For example, the scene where griffin twirls her hair. It’s shown visually and isn’t important enough to point out. This mostly just nick picking though, great story.

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Gibby's story: Act 1

This story is cool, this story can do with more of a show don’t tell mindset on this. Overall still good.

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act 1

I wonder if Terra was inspired by teen titan’s go Terra. I’m getting similar feelings. The story is also interesting, hoping to see more in the future.

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TJ's Desire Act 1

Cool story so far. I’m super confused with the birthday bit. Out of all the 15 birthdays T.J had; your telling me that it so happens that on her 16th birthday. She gets her first gift. Maybe I misunderstood, but her reaction after she gets the necklace makes me think otherwise. Overal good story.

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Act 1

I’m confused on why Alex doesn’t know what emotion are. Unless I miss understood what you meant. Alex seems to be experience strong emotions of anxiety, anxiousness, fear, and happiness. Plus, I am getting strong Persona 4 vibes. A game that centers around shadows and having to face one’s inner emotions in order to grow as a better person. I highly recommend checking that out for inspiration.

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Act 1 Storyboard

The story is semi captivating, its very grounded storyline and one that dosen’t require much explaining. Which is why I believe it would be best to show these events instead of tell. This stuff is already common sense to what happens in IRl so explaining wouldn’t be nessary. Either way great story.

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Act 1 - Stella

It appears to be interesting story; I know you said that the pictures move a little fast but I do think I could help to have more clarity on some scenes. I really excited to see the future acts.

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