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“Cornelius the Chameleon”

First off, I love how you celebrated your first story reel, mine too! Something you should be proud of cause you did an amazing job. Cornelious is a really well-developed fleshed-out character and the supporting characters compliment each other well. Also chameleon cove sounds like a super good time and I think your art complimented the story really niceley. Overall, great job! All the best to ya!

8

Week

Not all Shells sound like the Ocean

Love the theme and loved to see some solid representation! Curious to see where the beach is located? What beach, in particular, is this located in? I think having a more fleshed-out setting would really make this story pop. Visuals were easy to follow and the story flowed nicely and keeps you engaged! Great work. all the best to ya!

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Week

Gravity

Awesome work. You are doing an incredible service by bringing a spotlight on Spinal Bifida. I think the story's most interesting aspect is the relationship between Declan and Rylan. Tons of opportunities for character development and obstacles that these loving brothers to endure together. Awesome job, all the best to ya!

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Week

SMOKE ME

Fantastic work. I have been fortunate enough to follow this story for the past few weeks and the progress you made has been absolutely outstanding and inspiring. Massive props to handling a topic like addiction in a very creative and inventive way. This is a story that may even be appropriate for children and could serve as a teaching them the dangers of smoking. Awesome job! All the best to ya!

8

Week

Por las barbas de mi gato - My Cat´s whiskers

Expert, EXPERT visuals! Masterful artwork that was engaging and flowed nicely. I feel like I could have turned the sound completely off and understood the story. I could also connect with the main character because I too suffer from most things (cats included) and it can really be a struggle! I think you fleshed out Daniel in particular, really well.

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Por las barbas de mi gato - My Cat´s whiskers

I really like the characters, they seem so well fleshed out for such early stages. I also like how the lead suffers from allergies, I can definitely relate and it sure is a big challenge to overcome on its own, cant wait to see how he pulls it off.

7

Week

Skelly and Rachel / Act 1+2+3

Very cool! Just curious to see why the population is so low. So often projects explore the idea od over population, but you have a nice twist on the underpopulation. Also curious to see some of the implications as a result of so few people! Can't wait to see the final! Great work, All the best to ya!

7

Week

Mr. Charcoal in Recovery-Land

Really nice work and a cool story! I think your theme and moral is extremely relevant as a lot of people are starting to learn proper self-care. I believe that in the coming years were gonna see a lot of positive projects with good messaging, such as this one! Great work, All the best to ya!

7

Week

Upside Down to Right Side Up - Storyreel Act 1,2,3

Wow I can't imagine how intense it would be to have to live upside down! I think you really did an expert job of crafting a story that really resonates with the old expression "life turned upside down". It is well structured and I'm looking forward to the final project! All the best to ya!

7

Week

Sheldon takes flight

Such an inventive way of tackling such a relevant issue of fraudulent business/education activity. You made me want to root for penguins as I can absolutely relate!

7

Week

GRANDFATHER - ROUGH STORY REEL

Nothing like telling a story about family. It's one that is always sure to conjure emotion and themes that will last forever. Curious to see what sort of specific momento's the boy discovers from his grandfather's life! Great work, All the best to ya!

7

Week

Smoke Me - A Cigarette in Love

Awesome work! I really like this story! And you answered one the questions I had earlier in the week, in that the cigarette was not dead at the end! Just curious to see how he is able to live from now on. It seems like he is content enough to just be there with her. Very moving, great work. All the best to ya!

6

Week

LENNY & TWIRL

Just curious to see if you had a city in mind. Seems like there would be good opportunity (especially in the drone) to explore various landmarks and popular sites. Looking forward to seeing more! All the best to ya!

6

Week

The Antique Store - Acts 1 & 2

Quite an inventive idea! Would love to learn more about why she has trouble making friends, is it just in her natural character to be passive or was there an event or a friend from the past that went sour. Eager to learn more backstory!

6

Week

Act 2

Nicely done! Just curious to see more about the process of choosing a location, also eager to see what sort of things we learn about Zoe and why she decided to scout locations! Nice Work! All the best to ya!

6

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Sheldon takes Flight Acts1 and 2

School being a scam! I LOVE IT! I can relate because I attended 4 year University, and it has helped me very little and I know I'm not alone! Having something to relate to, I feel like I can connect with Sheldon! Great work, sign me up! All the best to ya!

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Week

Future Selves

Very inventive, just curious to learn a little more about the machine itself? How does the machine work exactly, what are the various components and where did he learn to make it? Otherwise, I think this is a really solid idea, and I can CERTAINLY relate to the idea of student loans being crippling! Great work, All the best to ya!

6

Week

SMOKE ME

Story was very clear, I have had a lot of fun following this story over the few week. Just continued kudos to you for tackling something like cigarette addiction in a really fun inventive way. Keep up the great work! All the best to ya!

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Week

ELIXIR - ACT ONE

Great work, I love the three dimensions, fleshed out charachters! I'm curous to hear more as to why the water is so low in Mexico city and how it's rationed. Can't wait to see how it turns out for them! Great work! All the best to ya!

5

Week

Act 1 Storyreel

Wow interesting! Would love to hear more about where the dinosaurs came from, was it a planet like Earth? Also does the planet they go to have ancient remains of dinousars, that would be an interesting and scary discovery for our dinos. Great work! All the best to ya!

5

Week

Gravity - Act 1

It's really great how you are bringing light to a disease such as spinal Bifida, it got me to research it as I was unsure what it was. It's brilliant writers such as yourself that bring awareness and understanding to important topics.

5

Week

Act 1

I was really able to follow the story without the use of any words (and I hadn't read the description). Really interested to see further character development! Great work All the best to ya!

5

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Smoke Me - Act One

Love the music choice, its perfect for the feel and tone! Great work! Would love to hear more about the Girl, she seems lonely. Can't wait to see more of her story! All the best to ya!

5

Week

Alien Reality TV show

Interesting! Now is this Alien version of Survivor, the same as US survivor, is Boston Rob gonna come back for the 1500th time? Is Jeff Probst host. Love to hear more about the show itself! Can't wait to see how you do it! All the best to ya!

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Underwuff goes under the sea

Love a good old dog story! Nice work, I'm curious to learn more about this world, is it a section of the ocean where these creatures exist. Also what kind of dog is Luanna?! Can't wait to see how you make this awesome! All the best to ya!

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