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Party Parrots NFT

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Party Parrots NFT

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Party Parrots NFT

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Party Parrots NFT

Thank you for your feedback. I cut out about 4-6 scenes to make it shorter with the scenes it didn't seem organic and either way if you think about it this is really a love story.

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Party Parrots NFT

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Party Parrots NFT

Thank you for your feedback. The drawings gave me a ton of anxiety and stress to get them done in such a short period of time. I have a disability and was hospitalized a week before this program started and I'm trying to take it easy while still completing it. This was extremely hard for me. I also work full time and run 4 businesses. The drawings didn't feel authentic for me when I was doing it. I had scrapped about 20 hand draw water colors before switching over to pixel art. This is the final cut and it's already had the art work on blockchain which is where it will stay. I appreciate your support and following through the creative development here. I felt very happy with the final project. The lack of support from everybody could be considered discouraging however I am extremely proud of this work and will leave it as is. Thank you so much for taking time to write back.

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Party Parrots NFT

Thank you for your feedback. With the way that this is being published which is straight to block chain the background being blank works better. This would be considered a series 1 of the project. Perhaps in future series it will have a more illustrated background. I would recommend checking out "Vee Friends" by Gary Vaynerchuk if you are interest in NFTs. He has already done a similar approach with raw drawings for a series 1and the most recent drops have very beautiful backgrounds. I am a storyteller and an artist for fun. I'm "ok" at drawing it's not my strength or major focus. Thank you for taking time to provide feedback.

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Party Parrots NFT

Thank you for mentioning that I will make note of it next time. I did not use any sound effects or narration by voice. I did have 2 songs I created. The first song is called "cafecito" it contains percussion sounds with conga and saxophone as well as a mallet type melody. The second song is called "opulence" it is a melody type song heavy with percussion that sounds like the feeling of water droplets or watching it on your hand. The melody on opulence is higher in pitch and the sound to me feels flying high and it provides a feeling of joy and hope. I'm try very hard to help deaf people when I can. A few years ago I worked on a documentary film that was for a community of individuals who were deaf. It was nice for my to gain empathy and to feel like the outsider as everybody around me was fluent in ASL and I only knew how to say "Hi, I am jackie" in sign. I'm trying to focus on music videos as that music is what my audience prefers to most however I enjoy doing the music videos and a lot of my music is remixes of public domain stories and content. I have a disability myself and this is important to me to help other with accessibility. I personally reached out to X about the live streams as I was unable to keep up and I image it was extremely difficult for y'all on the team as well. If you are okay with me asking, what would be helpful for captions or describing music? Is there a person or website you recommend?

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Dream Come True

Love it Bethany. Good job! Such a great message.

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Bean. (Full Storyboard)

I enjoyed this been watching it from the beginning as well. Great job!

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Skyfellers: Tales from Chusetts' Ranch

I love it Meredith

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Friends From Far Away

What did you like or love about this submission? I thought the art work was unique looking the visual story telling was good.
What did you find confusing or unclear? The biggest thing was trying to figure out what the stakes were and character development type related things to the story.
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? For short films it's difficult to develop 4+ characters. It might have been more engaging for the audience if it was 2-3. I thought the production aspects were good however the focus on story and characters it seemed off. May extending it further or the opposite of condensing would help.

Great job with production!

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The Dream Seller

What did you like or love about this submission? the drawings & subtitled
What did you find confusing or unclear? it was long
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? It might be better to have more visual story telling vs the actual text. There were many beautiful drawings however it was difficult to follow along with and pay attention.

On a side note I did want to stay thank you for your team because of mentioning the need for accessibility early on and having subtitles I made sure to include them in my film.

Great job!

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Party Parrots Week 7 3 Acts

Humans exist they are the ones that put them in captivity. I'm have images however this week I decided that using words animated was more important and focus my energy on the final delivery. Thank you for your feedback.

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Party Parrots Week 7 3 Acts

The images were the animated words. That was my decision for this week. Thank you for your feedback.

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ACT 1 & 2

What did you like or love about this submission? it was very clear to understand how you broke down everything the drawings were cute
What did you find confusing or unclear? it was clear
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? it would be cool to see the animals talking back to her or maybe like one of the animals consults. even if they don't talk about maybe having them react with their faces would be cute.

Great job!

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Billie_Act2

What did you like or love about this submission? drawings are great.
What did you find confusing or unclear? I did not catch some of the concept until reading it again I think there might have been a lot going on.
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? It seems like a very complex story it could be spread out a little more. Although if this is a feature film I believe it could work well. Maybe stretching your beats. A lot of the information was describing what was happening.

Great job with everything this is a more complex story then some of the others. The drawings are fantastic.

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Broken Dreams Act 1 & 2 (M & S swap)

What did you like or love about this submission? loved the drawings.
What did you find confusing or unclear? it was clear
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? look forward to the additional stuff.

good job!

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Storm Hero - Acts 1 and 2

What did you like or love about this submission? the drawings were excellent.
What did you find confusing or unclear? it was pretty clear except at the beginning I missed he was a super hero.
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? Maybe connecting at the beginning why he was a coder. Help us learn why he did it instead of being a super hero?

great job!

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Act 1&2

What did you like or love about this submission? I enjoyed reading the story it is different in a good way.
What did you find confusing or unclear? the sketches were kind of small so it was good to have the written out explanation.
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger?It might help to have a couple frames zoomed in or different types of shots.

Great job!

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POr las barbas de mi gato (My cat´s whiskers)

What did you like or love about this submission? I felt connected to this because I am also allergy to cats. lol i loved the drawings they were excellent.
What did you find confusing or unclear? I think it was pretty clear.
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? I think making video games and friends online not considered a real by will alienate some of your audience. A lot of people who would be connected to your film would be sad to see that what they do isn't good according to your story. That's the only thing that kind of made me sad about the story. Everything else was very good. You are doing an excellent job!

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Farron in the Valley: Act 1

What did you like or love about this submission? it was very detailed in description so you can really understand what is going on.
What did you find confusing or unclear? everything was clear
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? i think it might make it a little more connected if the first two people as the example one of them being a relative so ti raises the emotional connection. It's not needed it's good as is however this would take it to that next level.

great job!

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Rugula's Passion Act 1

What did you like or love about this submission? The art design is great and concepts
What did you find confusing or unclear? it was a lot of different things to take in at once.
What suggestions do you have to make it stronger? I think when you create the entire animation it will flesh out more right now it seemed a little conceded for all the concepts. It's great that you have so many things going on it's very creative. You are doing a great job! Keep up to the good work!

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Upside Down To Right Side Up - Act 1

This is a very nice concept because you are taking a moment of the character literally being upside down juxtapose to the actual personal conflict and internal growth. It seemed clear to me. A suggestion would be to give some high stakes for us to feel really connected to the character. Great job!

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Act 1 Thumbnails - Borealis

The drawings are very nice. It would have been nice to zoom in to each one to see it a little bigger. Everything was great for the story.

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