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Week

- Reflection -

I had no idea as to what was going on because there was no audio to video to help to develop the story.

8

Week

Final Video

The drawings were good. I was confused as to what happened with her and the computer and thought it could be made clearer. A good way to make it stronger would be to zoom in on the amination so you don't show everything else on the app and its just the video being shown.

8

Week

The Story of a Reptilian Vampire

I thought the amination was outstanding and love the fact that I was able to understand the story although there was no narration to it. however, I was confused as to what the moral of the story is. To make it stronger I would suggest making the moral clearer. Good job.

8

Week

Ashes story

I liked the amination that you used and thought that it was a well-written story. It was unclear as to what those blue blob things were though. I think you could have made it better by doing the voice-overs with multiple takes because I could tell that you were having trouble with your lines at some points in the video.

8

Week

My Story

it was confusing as to what the moral is because the video ended before you had finished talking.

7

Week

Po act 1,2 & 3

This made feel happy because the two reunite after having not spoken in years. I think the moral is that family is family and families love each other.

7

Week

complete storyboard cloud surfing

This made me feel a sense of accomplishment. I think that the moral was that failure is never a reason as to why a person should give up and quit.

7

Week

Oregon journey

This is made me engaged with the story because all of the characters and what is happening. I think the moral is that families allows reunite with each other.

7

Week

Georges story

This made me feel upset because George was willing to sacrifice his life for the creature. I think the moral is that having friends who are there for you can help a person who might be going through hard times.

7

Week

Leaf dude finale

This made me feel determined to something I want to see happen. I was going to say that the moral was that determination is the key to success but instead it is to not give up.

7

Week

Acts 1, 2, and 3 storyreel

I like that he was so obsessed with video games that his life eventually became one. I am confused as to how he came back to life after dying. Next time I think you should make that a bit clear.

6

Week

Act 1 and Act 2

I like the drawings that you did. Where did the hourglass come from? Good job.

6

Week

Johns Journey

I liked the drawings. Why did they travel from Missouri to Oregon, also when is this taking place. Good job.

6

Week

Trail of tears

I like that you took an actual event and simplified it in order to create a story. However what happened to the Indians when the family took the land? Next time make it a bit more clear.

6

Week

Austin's Story

I thought the animations were great. However, I was super confused as to what was going on because there was no sound on the video. Next add narrations so it's easier to understand.

6

Week

Act 1+2 storyreel.

I like how although I didn't see act 1 I was still able to somewhat understand what was going on. However, I was confused as to what that blue thing was in the video. Next time speak a little bit louder.

6

Week

cloud surfing storyboard

I love the thought that you put into making this. However, I am very confused as to how they are able to serf on the clouds. Does gravity not exist in this story? Next I would suggest making that a bit more clear.

5

Week

Storyboard Rough Draft

It's a decent plot for a story and like that used an artificial voice to narrate it. However, I am curious as to whether or not you thought of this on your own or took inspiration from Superman because this is very similar to his back story. Next narrate the video yourself so you can add emotions to it.

5

Week

Act 1

I liked the idea for this video and find it interesting. When does the story take place? Next time add color to the drawing so it catches the viewer's eye.

5

Week

Act 1

I loved that he wanted so much to become the god of video games and ended up having his turned into a video game. Is he in an alternate reality inside the Pac-man machine? Good job.

5

Week

I like how short the video was. Why is the girl sleeping under the tree tens of years later? Is she one of the children or is she the Mother? Next add more detail to the video so it becomes more clear.

5

Week

Lil monster

I loved the drawings that were used for this because they help to tell the story better. Why is Billy shy around other monsters? Next film at a different angle so the video isn't sideways.

5

Week

Spaceship Boy

I like the plot of this story. Why is the kid mad at the robot. Also, next time bring something to block out the background noise.

4

Week

Story spine

I liked how the drawing went along with what was being said in the video. However, I am confused as to why they went to Idaho in the first place. Finally, a good way to make this stronger would be to retake the second or third photo because it was hard to see what had been drawn because of the reflection from the light.

4

Week

Jo's toy bone

I liked how good the artwork was for each of the photos. however, I am confused as to how the dog escaped from the house in order to go to the pool and park. In order to make this stronger I think it would be best to take still shots of the photos and do voiceovers so that the audio can be edited and the camera work isn't shakey.

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