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Lewis and his Magic Kite

I love the story and the drawings, i find it a little confusing why he just wants a kite, I think you could make the drawings a little better and go into more detail

8

Week

Achromatic World

I like the story but there was no words I kinda feel that made it worse, it was a very nice story though and I loved the drawings

7

Week

Act 1, Act 2 and part of Act 3.

I like how the charecters mature throughout the movie, I find it a little confusing why it just cuts off at the end without sound, and to make it stronger try adding detail about why the mom just lets her go on such a crazy adventure without supervision. and why the queen just says yes to any random person

7

Week

Griffin, Willow, and Their Furniture ACT 3

I like the story and how they made up in the end and hug the couch. I find it confusing why they just randomly started crying, I think you could make it a little better by making so they give back some of the things to the couch for centementil value.

7

Week

Flora and Fauna

I think if you want the cat to find something you could make it a dog because they protect and they have good noses, I like the story line and how it all ties together, I find it a little confusing why its so dark, also why does she turn into the monster thing.

7

Week

Weighted

I liked how you could tell the story just by the pictures, I find it a little confusing without sound though it doesn't really bring it to life its more of a picture art project. I think by adding sound you could make this 100 times better

7

Week

"Pull" Act 1,2 & 3

I really liked how the story just took off and how he has so much detail in the story. I find it interesting how the gravity stops working. why does it stop working? what happened for it to stop working. I don't really have anything to make it stronger It is really good and I'm not sure what I could say to make it better.

7

Week

Pixar full story reel

I really like the voices, I find it unclear what your saying when you talk with the voices, maybe try and improve the voices

6

Week

ferris and gordon crazy insane adenturwe ft mozila fox

I like the story, I find it confusing how you cut the audio, make it stronger by not doing that

6

Week

Kara

I really like the story and how she wants to change, I find it a little confusing why she just wanted to be on her phone during the dance, why doesn't she want to meet new people? I think to make it a little stronger you could make more detail about her mother and why she's controlling.

6

Week

Act 1and Act 2

I really like the cliff hanger, I find it a little confusing about why everyone got sick, was it natural of was it part of a plot to kill the queen and take power over the whole city? I think you could do that if you wanted a twist.

6

Week

Act 1 and 2

I really like this it was great

6

Week

Griffin, Willow, and Their Furniture ACT 2

I liked the story but it was kind of a repeat I think you could make it better by adding some more detail about why their mothers not home and go into that. also try to make it less just about the room make it more about their real life like what they do what they like

6

Week

Act 1 and 2

thank you

5

Week

Act 1 Storyreel

I like the way you stated your mind on the topic

5

Week

george!!!! act one!!!!!

I love the way you had so much detail it really brought the story to life, I could feel the emotion in the story. I also loved the drawings really well drawn had lots of detail in the face

4

Week

Story spine

i like the story and how she fixes the plant, i find it a little confusing why the plant lashed out. i think you could improve on the chareter as a plant

4

Week

Story Spine

i like the idea and how she goes back in time and changes the outcome. i find it a little confusing why it becomes a butterfly affect and makes it bad. i think you could go into more detail about the trasfer student and why she hates her so much

4

Week

Jonathon Q. Sniffer

i loved the story and how he matured so much, from the begging he was happy and then he was sad and frustrated. i find it a little confusing why he had a black leg in the middle of the story and not the begging. i think you could improve on how and why he had abandinment issues

4

Week

Team Mitches Story Spine

i loved how deep you went into detail about how everything is happening and how there are monsters. i find it a little confusing how the orgnization wanted the watch, why did they want it so bad? i think you could make it a little stronger by going into detail about the watch and why they want it

3

Week

What to Choose?

i like the drawing and the different shades of gray depicting the most popular things in the drawing. i find it confusing why cant she leave? what is stoping her? is it the cat/dog? or is it somthing else? try adding some context of why she cant leave or what is stoping her instead of just saying she cant leave. it needs a reason behind why she cant leave . give it some context.

3

Week

week 3 submission

i like the drawing. what perspective is he looking from? maybe you could add more detail to the charecter to make it so he stands out more

3

Week

Jonathon Lizards: Our Character in their world

i like the drawing and how hes looking at the ocean. i find it confusing why he just looks at the ocean with a fire behind him. could he get hurt or not? i think to make this a little better you could make it so he has more of a backround story like how he ended up having a lack of empathy and compassion.

2

Week

Milo

i like how he looks like a cowboy, what does he want to design? what kind of things? i think that to make him better would be to give him a personal life and how he lives that

2

Week

Derek Character

that is a lot of writing very well said

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