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Fly Sheldon!

Sheldon! He has such big dreams, which is a great setup. I was unclear on how he builds a desire to fly. Maybe add something about flight school! Great work!

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Introducing Emily

I love Emily and how three dimensional she is! Her voice is the best! I want to know more about the ghosts... why did they chose Emily's store to be in? What is Emily missing/is it a ghost? I can't wait to see what your team does next!

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A Cigarette in Love - Write for Animation Team

I loved the animation and the shot of the woman. I am very impressed. I am a bit unclear about why she has cigarettes' and why there is only one... where are the others? Is she trying to quit smoking? Why does he love her? Once cleared up, this will be a strong story! Great job!

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Kirk - Character Profile

I love Kirk! They are so cool and confident. I also love the voice inflection, because it reflects how we see the character. I find it a bit confusing about the Oval universe. What goes on there? Is it full with other Kirks? Once you clarify this, your story will be stronger, but that's minor. Great work!

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Dionne the Silverfish: Character Profile

I love that you used the idea of a silverfish! That is very creative! I found it unclear about why she needed to be open... did something happen that made her shut off? Also, where did her brother go? I would clarify those things in order to make the story stronger, but great work!

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Week 2 Upload (Sarah Estes)

I love how the character is relatable! I wonder if she will defeat her creative block. I would suggest that the character learns more about herself through this art block journey.

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What If Questions

Hello! I like these ideas. My favorite is the one about drawing reality. I liked this one because it could lead to a world of possibilities and several things that could also go wrong. I wonder if this is a specific talent to one person or to everyone. I was a little unclear the extent of what they could draw. Like, could they draw something unreal like a unicorn? Then, would the unicorn come to life? Great job!

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What if

Hello! I really enjoyed these ideas. You can have a lot of possibilities with these. My personal favorite was the one about the birthmark. I wonder the different types of jobs and how they are reflected on the birthmark. I was unclear about why the one child did not receive a birthmark. Great job!

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What if...

Great ideas! My favorite "What if" was the first one. I liked the idea that two witches are raising a baby star to be lit into the sky. I wonder more about the witches background and how they got into star catching. I was unclear about why the star ran away. Did it not want to be in the sky? Great work!

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The Best Ideas Ever

Great job! I really liked your ideas! My personal favorite was the idea about the healer and hurter plants. I wonder how they can make their love work or if it is even possible. I want to know about how their plant families feel about this forbidden love. I was a little unclear about how they found each other. Do they live in the same environment? Great work!

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A Music Festival;A Magical Pot;A Family of Trees

Great work! I really liked the idea about the food in the pot. I love how it targets specifically a Jewish family and their tradition of cooking in their culture. I wonder where the pot originally came from. I want to see an origin story of the pot and how many generations it has been passed down through. I was a bit unclear about the role the pot plays throughout the story. Is the pot the main character or the Jewish family? This was a great idea!

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WEEK 1: Something Different, Something New

Wow! Great work! I really like these "What If" ideas. I love how they are all very detailed! My favorite idea is the world of color one. It is a very interesting concept. I wonder how the people of the black and white town would react to seeing this amazing thing. Can these people even see color? I also wonder why this colorful thing is coming to the town... and what is it? I am a little unclear of what the colorful, magically creature is. I can't wait to see more of your work!

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Week 1-What if?

Hello! Great work! I loved these "What If" ideas and the art behind them. My favorite was the shark in the pool. I liked this one the most because when I was younger, I thought there was a shark in my pool too. It is very relatable and a fun concept. I wonder how the shark would act. Would the young children be friends with it? Or would the shark be mean? I want to know the timeline of the ages of the kids as well. Are they grown up? Is the shark grown up? I think the timeline was a little unclear. However, this has a lot of potential for a coming of age movie. Nice job!

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