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I like the idea of the conversion from the allergy animal, I think it will create a love/hate relationship about it. I wonder how the story developes, what it becomes a little unclear or confusing, is if that allergy would ever go away once he transforms or would it be a constant thing? I suggest the story can be stronger if the kid tries to find a way to live with its condition, which I don't know if that is what you were referring, but overall like it!

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Allison's Three What If's

My favorite idea is the third one, with the alien babies, it would be such a fun story develop with problems and parent comedy
What makes me wonder is why would this person take those alien babies instead of calling national security.
What is unclear to me is why would those babies end up in a common's person front door

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What If...? (ft. Bears, Dogs, and Pangea)

My favorite idea is definitely Pangea, historically wonderful on what would happen if this exist
What makes me wonder is how some constructions or transportations services would be along the large continent.
Is a very clear idea

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What if...?

My favorite idea is the paper plane, I like the simple idea of the paper plane wondering what it is like going around the world or even doing it.
It makes me wonder of how some things lead you to go to other places or how you can just go with the wind.
The thing I find unclear would be how the plane would be moving around a lot to such long distances

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What if? - Luis Rivera

My favorite idea was the cycle of life in the train, I think it can be a wonderful experience of self knowledge.
What makes me wonder is how the situations or scenarios would develop on it and what kind of situations can the main character develop.
What is a little unclear for me is why would this train be present in someone's life, why would this train even exist

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Week 1: What If

My favorite ideas was the messages from the beyond, the way of exploring the messages can be very broad and interesting.
I wonder how the messages would be like, how it would be transported
Anything unclear could be for the plant vine girl, if there would be any moment that she could stay still or how still does she need to be in order to not grow any vines

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What Ifs

I really like your first idea, I think it gives a great idea of how people have history underneath some feelings, it would be interesting to develop the whole way of telling this stories.
I wonder a little bit more of the story behind flying fishes
Something unclear could maybe be still the flying fish on how it would be use in the sky, but still is a very abstract situation in which I would like to hear more about

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