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Living Room

A great story line, and a great movie, but it is really long. I would highly suggest making it a little shorter next time.

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The Magic of Music

I really like your submission, but I think you need more art work. I saw the same picture about 5 times, and I like seeing more art work to help tell a story.

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The Life of the Spider in the Corner

I really like your story line, but ait is too short, and what happens to the spider later? Does the woman find her? You need some more detail. I also like your animation?

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2

I like the idea of the story, but I am confused, what is wrong with him? What is his backstory? It is also very short, and I think next time you need to add some more miner beats. I love your music, and sound effects though! I also like how many pictures there are. I do think you need some more narration though.

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final cowspiracy

I like your story line, and I understand that he is trying to solve a mystery, but I would like to see more of his backstory next time. I love the music and sound affects! Nice job!

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Her soulmate was her enemy

I really like how detailed your story was. I loved your art work and your story line. I think you did a nice job on the story line. The only thing I would suggest is to make your words a little more clear.

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Ryan

I like the idea of your story, but I got really confused at the end, I lost track of what was happening. I really like your sound effects, and music. Next time I would try not using the storyboard outline, and using actual 8 by 11 paper. I would also like to see some color next time.

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Lewis and his Magic Kite

It is a very creative story. My only suggestion is to next time take away the spine story out line and make it flow a little bit better.

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Griffin, Willow, and Their Furniture ACT 3

l really like your story. I love the sound affects. I also think the animation in the scene with the couch eating the groceries is very clever, I can not wait to see the final project!

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Cora, Friendship and Accepting Your Past

l like your story line though I would like to see more visual parts to each of the characters and l would like to know the new students name. I also feel you need to add a few more miner beats, to make your characters relatable.

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Po ACT 1&2

I like your story line, though you were suppose to upload your whole story.l would also like it if you added a few more characters. Nice art work though!

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Stella Act 1 and Act 2

Thank you for commenting! I will take your comments into consideration!

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Griffin, Willow, and Their Furniture ACT 2

I really like your idea and your art work! The only thing I would suggest is to slow down your talking! It is very fast and a little hard to know what you are saying sometimes!

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Act 1and Act 2

I like your story line a lot! I would like to see some color in your drawings, and the only thing I found confusing is how did the bubble get there?

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Earth's lament

I like your video, and your art work!

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Kara

I absolutely love your art work, and your story line! The only thing I would suggest is I did see a few repeated pictures in the video and I think it would be best if you did not repeat any images. Great work, though!

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Storyboard Act 1

I like your story line a lot, and your animation. I really like how in the first scene you are looking at a TV! The only thing I would suggest changing is not typing some of the things Tristin in doing. For example, one of them was ‘Tristin pulls out his phone’ don’t type that out, instead show us that. Nice work, though!

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Act 1: The Lonely Fish

I like your story line, but I would appreciate more background information. Also I think it would be helpful if there weren’t such big pauses in between when you talk!

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Helping Others

Wow, that was absolutely incredible! Your animation is incredible! I can not wait to see more!

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Lux Act 1

I enjoyed your act 1, and your art work. I would like to really get to know this character a little better, maybe there past, and family members.

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Meeting a Friend, Act 1

I really like your story line, though I would like some more images, and I felt as if you shared your whole story even though you were only supposed to do act one! Can’t wait to see more!

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STory SPine

I really like your story idea, but it is a little short, and I would like more detail in your story, more action. What things was he doing that he should have not been. How may his parents or siblings be contributing to his anxiety? I love your art work, too!

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A world owned by wind story spine

Nice Job, I would like to see more when he is in the sky, how does he work with the wind to get where he is going, are there anymore obstacles?

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Story Spine

I really like your idea! Instead of showing the words though I would really like to see the characters and the drawings. Also I think it would be helpful if you went into a quieter room so that there is less background, and try speaking a little louder. Nice story line though!

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cool epic story (epic)

This is definitely a deeper story. I enjoy how you spoke clearly and I knew what you were saying, I would try and make the ending a little longer. I would also like to understand how he gets over his parents death, because I feel people will always be a little sad about someone’s death.

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