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Creative Journey (WIP) (Sarah Estes)

I like that your draws are very expresive! And very cute!

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Por las barbas de mi gato - My Cat´s whiskers

I like that your story is about cats and the character design is very cute!
I think it was way too easy how they find out she talked with animals.
I would make it a little "harder" how they find out that they changed souls.

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love

I love the colors you used and the idea of finding a new love.
I found confusing how to identify the character because of the concept art.
The heart is too much time on screen, you could cut it :)

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Samson, the magical sword.

I love the message of your story! How the sword finds a way to protecto without fighitng!
I think is very undestandable, the story and the narrative. Congratulations!!!

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Walk In My Shoes

Hello. i liked how you see the mother supporting her daughter.
The character design can be a little confusing who is the daughter and who is the mother 'cause both designs are similar. Also I think the shots can be a little more dynamic.
The way you merge the colors to unify them both is beautiful!

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Bubble Pop

Hello! I love the message of your story! How everyone lives inside their bubble is a great example of our society.
I understand that people got angry when she poped their bubble but I think that part of the message is that everyone is so trapped in their own mind and need to explore the world, so when they get angry and just came back to their bubble they don't have this change...
I like how the girl understands to respect that other people likes their bubbles :)

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Party Parrots Week 7 3 Acts

Hello! Is a cute story!
It would be nice to have boards to complement it! Even if you don't draw or don't have the time, you could search online images :)
Also, I was wondering, it's a world were humans didn't exist?

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+act 3

Hello Fiona!
I love your drawings and the visual narrative is great!
I just did not catch up why is this creature there? What are his intentions?

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Samson the magical Sword - Storyreel

Hello! Super cute story! And the moral of the story is beautiful.

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Croxi - Act 1, 2 and 3

Hello! Is a cute story! The visual narrative is very clear.
I just think it would be nice if the jewl has some other meaning. Why the ocean wants it?

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Lenny and the Song of the Forest

Hello! It's a very beautiful message! Great story!!

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The Little Apprentice - rough edit

Hi, Allison! I love it! The visual narrative is very nice and easy to understand! And the story is very cute!

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Old Dogs New Tricks Acts 1-3

Hello! It's so cute! I love dogs!
For me it was unclear what happens to Oscar's body when he swips.

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Act 2

Hello! The story sounds very interesting!
It would be great to have a little more boards to complement the story.

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Snowed In Act 2

Hello! I like the story! I love that you used colors to difference the characters and travel trayectory! Looks very nice.
It would me great to know a little more about the characters :)

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The Little Apprentice - Act Two

Hello!! Hope you are feeling better!
I like the video! I think is good you know what happens, just have to conect the actions later :) I love how you narrated it! so funny and dynamic!

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Act 2: Omen vs the Spirits

Hello! Is a cute story! I love how you draw Omen!
Did the ghosts attracted Omen intentionally?

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Billie_Act2

I LOVE YOUR STORY! Is so great! I was immediately captivated by it!
I think everything is very clear.
I just have a little suggestion. I know the fear of failiure is a human thing that we all have, but if you could explain or have a specific reason why Billie is so afraid to fail.

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Naz & Kati

Hello! The moral of the story is so beatiful! I think is a message not often told but so relatable.
I just found cofusing Kati's disappearance, because she was gone once 'cause she show the bird, but the second time she just didn't show up.
Also, it would be a nice wink if the bird Naz founds has something that you can relate to Kati.

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Broken Dreams Act 1 & 2 (M & S swap)

Hello! Is a touching story! And I like the message very much.
I'm just not sure how it will be when they'll "experience" each others feelings, will it be like spoken, or with the facial expresions or they will experience the moments like they live them?

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Act 1 Storyreel

What a cute story! I love dinosaurs!
I feel like we need to understand a little more about the dinosaurs world, why the can travel? Do they talk? where they come from?

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Act 1

I really like this story! I love the drawings, and the framing of the shots are great!
I think would be great to know a little more about the characters goals and a little back story so we can understand why this job is her dream

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Croxi - Act 1

Hello!! Interesting story! And the draws are very good! It's a very good first act.
I read the story, but visually I did not get they were family, but everything else have great visual lecture!

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Cian and the Metaverse

Hello! It´s a great story!
I think it would be nice having a little more information about how people interact with the metarevese, I´m saying this because it took me a little to relaize you were talking about a "internet place". Also, does Cian has a reason to be that much time living in the metaverse or it´s just he does it like everyone else? Because it would be stronger if he has an special reason, like somenthing in his life he hates and prefers being inmerse in the metaverse.

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ELIXIR - ACT ONE

I love the scenes you created! And I love this story and art!
It was just a little confusing that they lived that long without water, I supposed they found little parts with water before the well, but for me it was not that clear.

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