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Week

Ice Oil

I like how the message is a good symbolism on oil spills destroying the environment, and people to.
Why was the video entirely background music.
Maybe have Tristen realize how much harm their project is having an impact on the environment, and the people around them. and he decides to confront Brad about what they are doing is wrong.

8

Week

BBE

It seems to have a nice premise.
Why wasn't anyone talking.
Add the recordings into the video.

8

Week

Aquiva

I love it because of the twist.
What happened to Scarlet.
maybe have scarlet try to use the cure no to save the queen, but to save the other marine life that is also sick.

8

Week

Cora and the Hourglass

I like this story because of Cora character arc. She starts of a typical popular girl, that gets jealous that her friends are starting to hang out more with Courtney then with her, but when she the damage that she done she rightfully apologizes, and decides to become a better person.
Nothing was confusing.
maybe you can cut out the fact the Courtney was really trying to steal Cora friends from her.

8

Week

A World Without Shadows Storyboard

love it because it should how to face your fears and insecurities, and not everyone will judge you for your passion
nothing was confusing.
maybe you can have Finley meet another kid who is getting bullied, and have him stand up for him.

7

Week

full story!

I how the story is basically the girl wanting a world where everyone can see color, because she is interested in fashion.
What with the time skips.
Maybe have her mother not disappear, but instead she meat someone who is a color seer.

7

Week

Georges story

I like how you taut us how even people who do the must unforgivable things, are still worthy of compassion to.
Nothing was confusing.
It's perfect the way it is.

7

Week

complete storyboard cloud surfing

I like how she lets go of logic a follows her instincts.
Nothing was confusing.
Its perfect the way it is.

7

Week

Jane against the world.

I like how the kids realize that their actions is hurting the marine life down in the ocean.
Nothing was confusing.
It's perfect as it is.

7

Week

Lil monster

I like how the little monster was able to use his light powers to give color back to his flowers.
Nothing was confusing.
maybe have the elder monster explain to the little monster on how every monster has their own special powers.

7

Week

Un día en rosarito

I like how sometime the bad guy does not get punished.
Nothing was confusing.
Maybe explain what happened to Panchies.

7

Week

Week seven story board about slavery

I like Libby character Arc.
why is there slavery.
you don't have to change a thing.

6

Week

Hunter

I like how Hunter's story is very similar to Spiderman, as when they both gave up using their powers to stop crime, they unintentionally lead to someone they love getting hurt along the way.
Nothing was confusing to me.
I wouldn't change a thing.

6

Week

Earth's lament

I like the design of the space station.
nothing was confusing.
nothing needs to be changed.

6

Week

Kara

I like how you showed that someone who can be build up really successful, can come crashing down.
nothing was confusing.
it's perfect the way it is.

6

Week

Great Protector Pt. 2

I like the set up.
is everyone in this world birds?
you don't have to change a thing.

5

Week

Act 1 minor beats

I like how the ending of the story can hint on some little hope for the tree.
Nothing was confusing.
I wouldn't change a thing.

5

Week

Act 1

I like the assume reveal at the end of the video.
Nothing was confusing.
Maybe instead of camera crows rushing up to her, have the someone yell out cut.

5

Week

Spaceship Boy

I like how you touched on how children can feel angry at their parents for abandoning them, and take their anger out on their current guardians.
Nothing seemed confusing for me.
How about have the kid realis that the robot has been more of a parent to him, then his real parents ever where.

5

Week

Eddie

I think it was great how Eddie has a passion for something that did not exist before in this world.
What do you mean that people can create a face through something that their passionate about.
Maybe have Eddie discover that music is her passion, and tries to convinced everyone that music is something to be passionate about.

5

Week

Pepi II act one

I like the horror in your story.
Nothing was confusing to me.
maybe give a backstory to the mummy Pepi

5

Week

Act 1

I really like world building behind your story.
nothing was confusing for me.
why not expand on Mitche's past on being a slave.

5

Week

Act 1

I like the fact that their is a secret town that the rest of the world has never heard of.
nothing was confusing to me.
maybe you could elaborate on the Maritza and Miyana personality, and see what makes them different from each other.

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Week

Week 4

I like how its sorta similar to The Wizard of Oz.
What exactly is the moral of the story?
Maybe add a villain in the story to try and stop Wayne Smith from returning to his family.

4

Week

Video about slavery

I like the story on Carma.
how exactly does bullying lead into savory?
maybe have Libby go back to her old school stronger then ever.

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