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Walk In My Shoes

Hi!, I am a mom and this story was super emotional for me. I would say your pacing might be a bit fast, but the current story worked so well with the music. Good luck with any further development, it is a very sweet concept.

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BOREALIS - Final Cut

I can't believe that I missed this from prior submissions, it was amazing. I love this story, I hope you go further into producing it. Beautiful.

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ECHO

This makes me think of the TV show Amazing Stories it would fit great in that format. Love the concept. Good job!.

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Dream Come True

Hi Bethany, your story is positive and very nice. Good job.

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Naz & Lili

This is a sweet story, your images are gorgeous, and the music works so well with the story. Great job, I love the meaningful images of the free parrot.

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Sebas and Mau

Si. Colombiana tambien ;-) Thank you for your sweet comments.

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Sebas and Mau

I like this idea!. We might just do that. Thank you!.

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Love and Death Full Final

This is so great. I felt all the emotions. Great job! All about this works, voice over, illustrations. Congratulations!

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Partners in Crime

Hi, interesting story. You really should do some narration and slow down some of your pacing, for what I could tell, some images could use a few more seconds on the screen. I like the idea of two badguys falling in love.

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Sheldon Takes Flight!

I have to say I love this story a lot. I love your idea. It's a bit quick, your pacing could slow down so we can connect with the characters emotionally a little more. But overall great job!.

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"HELLO"

Hi Matthew and Christopher, I remember watching this story earlier on, maybe as an idea or a story spine. I tried to follow but it's a bit hard with the narration, maybe once you get to a flow of the images with sound effects it will come through better. I recall liking your idea a lot and it is something I would enjoy watching as a finished short. Good luck!

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Lottie

Hi, I like that her hair, although it brings her pain, is also the connection to her otter family. I hope you bring her some resolution!. Also your drawings are very cute.

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Une Masquerade Ridicule

Your drawings and composition are beautiful, good luck creating the rest of your story and help them in their journey.

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love

Ahmira, your story is simple and sweet. I think you can grow on what you have done, specially the beginning, maybe introduce the character a little more.

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Omen, The Black Cat

Hi Melissa, Omen is a great character. I love his power and how he can control it. I realize recording this in one sitting is very hard, but maybe you can try a few times until you get it right. Because your story is totally worth telling. There are a few areas that could be described better in the drawings and maybe it will save you some words, like when he sees the spirit. Good luck and keep at it!

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Marin- Acts 1-3

Hi, I hopped here to see if there were any new submissions. Your story is lovely and well paced (pacing is something we are struggling with at the moment). I love the character, and how they grow through out the story. I think my one hanging point is the wife, it's sad that she is still looking for Marin. I realize that you are over 5 minutes, but maybe there can be some resolution for her? or maybe not add her at all?. Other than that your story is beautiful, congratulations.

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Sheldon takes flight

Lovely story. I am split between grandpa dying (last hurrah!) and him living out his life with Sheldon in the island. The story overall is very well set up, uncomplicated and with a good moral (all those suckers that missed out and got scammed!! HAHA). I do have one question, how did grandfather's family get to this island where Sheldon grew up?. I think I kinda want to know that. Was it accidental? Was it an adventure mission gone wrong?.

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Magic at the Beach: Rough Acts 1, 2, & 3

Hi you wrapped this up beautifully. Your drawings are gorgeous and expressive. Bravo!.

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Orion the Brave - Acts 1,2 & 3

This is a lovely story, very well assembled. My feelings kept evolving for Orion. And I love love your setting and characters in general. Great job!!.

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Underwoof goes under the sea - All Acts

Hi, you have a good story going on here, and your drawings are very nice. I think some things you are rushing here and that if you step back you can improve. A lot of your act1 you could probably just show with images, maybe develop a few more frames on describing Luanna's personality, she was a happy dog, distracted, friendly but unwanted. The way you lead her to the beach and she encounters Naya de crab works, but what if you keep Naya in the story, with the whale...Naya hops on and they all sail happily. Naya saves Luanna from her life and introduces her to a new one, I like that they become good friends, maybe she holds on to Luanna's tail as they go about on the whale.

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Love and Death Full Short

My favorite part, of this story that I like a lot, is the timing when she broke a piece of the candle, she didn't even think about it. I think your story is so great. Maybe the pacing of it needs a pass, but I realize a lot more can be done in the next two weeks. The structure of it is great and your ending is solid. Congratulations!!

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The Antique Store - Acts 1 & 2

Hi Sam, I love antiques so for me, this is a very creative way to feature antiques in a story. I always imagine the life that existed around the items that I see. If I have a suggestion is maybe your pacing is a bit slow, I think you can probably approach this as it has been discussed in classed on replacing dialogue with images. Some of your images are already very descriptive so maybe it will help. Emily's design is so perfect, proper and describes her persoanility. Looking forward to seing your final in 2 weeks.

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Indigo Kid

Your setup is very good. You make it clear that although he is attracted to go to earth and has the opportunity thorugh a tragedy. I also really like the pet dino-robot. During the teleportation scene though you lost me a bit. I am not sure if you need that whole break with music about going to Earth when we already had a break with images from earth before. I imagine teleportation being more inmediate. My suggestion would be to cut that and use it later on, maybe when he is leaving earth or when he is spreading his dad's ashes. This is a good concept!.

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Love and Death Act 1 and Act 2

AHH This is great! your character design, voices are working so well. I love this story. Great job!!.

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Broken Dreams Act 1 & 2 (M & S swap)

Hi, I read your note on not being complete yet but I love where you are going with this. Looking forward to a more completed set with Act 3 because I feel your story has so much emotion and possibility. Good luck!.

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