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Living Room

Incredible! I love the development of your characters with the use of interesting voices in the voiceover instead of having a narrator! These two characters are so iconic! It was a little unclear where their mom was. Since the older one is doing so much work, it seems as though the mother is irrelevant in their lives as if she doesn't live with them.

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Week

Lulus adventure

Incredible! I loved your incorporation of sounds to go alongside the visuals. It really kept me interested and excited to see what was going to happen next! wish the voiceover glitched and stopped at certain times which may have just been my computer, but it was a bit distracting.

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Week

Hunter

Incredible! Your drawing and story/narration were very interesting! I loved the ending. The story was a little unclear only when it got to the clone section because it seemed as though this concept of clones had come out of nowhere. I would have loved to see Audrey's opinion on Hunter's decisions right after the "one year later" section.

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Week

Final Video

I absolutely love your drawings and how they add but do not distract from the character complexity and storyline. I would love for you to further elaborate on the grand adventure she takes to reach the other realm. It seemed a little bit over-generalized and skipped over. When she arrives at the other realm, I feel the audience needs some clarity on the resolution between her and her friend. Why did her friend stop logging on in the first place? How would the story be different if the friend was not excited to see her?

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Week

Memories

I love your artwork. Without knowing what your story was about (from the description), I would not have known her friend was dead. Adding a voiceover would make this clearer, but I also like how you expressed your story only through pictures, hinting at the overarching theme of the story that you never know what someone is going through, and how an outsider point of view only understands the complexities of something when seen more in-depth.

7

Week

Draw Your Life (Ted's Minor Beats - Act 3)

I love this story! It made me feel joyful at the end, and I loved the moral about the importance of creativity!

7

Week

act 1 2 and 3 dream factory

I loved this story! It made me feel empowered, and I loved the theme about being a better person.

7

Week

story thing

Love this! The story made me feel happy, and I like the moral of friendship.

7

Week

Avery & Act 1-3

I really enjoyed this story! It made me feel connected to the characters, and I loved the moral about how you can forgive yourself for the problems society puts upon you in order to find your true identity.

7

Week

Leaf dude finale

I love this story! It made me feel hopeful, and i like the moral about not giving up

7

Week

Lenta and Nix acts 1-3

I love the story. The enthusiastic narration makes me more interested in what is going to happen next! I like the moral is about being a better person overall.

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Week

Story reel for Act 1 & 2 for Aspen

I love the drawings of your characters! They definitely complement the personalities of the character. Very creative! I would love to hear the balloon language be spoken in a high-pitched voice, mimicking the way helium from a balloon makes your voice sound.

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Week

Act 1 & Act 2

I love your story and the changes you made from last week to this week. I don't understand why the guy on the left side of the picture of them working on homework at his house does not have the bottom half of his body. It looks as though his lower half has melted off into space. I don't think that is what you were aiming for the picture to be like. Maybe if you just added a line at the end of his torso, it would look more natural.

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Act 1: Benjamin the Liar

I love the way you portrayed the people's faces. I would love to see more of how and why Carl began to lie. Great work!

5

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Week 5

I like how you allowed the audience to sympathize with the character. I would love to see more of a climax in your story. great drawings!

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Act 1

Great concept! I would love to see him playing packman and Minecraft earlier in the story. Nathan seems like a cool and fun character, and I like how he has no hair.

5

Week

Storyboard Rough Draft

I really enjoyed this story. I wonder if, in your final, you could add the farmer's thoughts on the child. Has he always wanted one? Was there some sort of unexplainable connection the discovered the first moment he saw the child? The second visual is appealing to the eye and it stuck out for me. Great work!

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Week

Act 1 Storyreel

I love your visuals and story, but I would like to see the ocean spread to the ends of the box on the first square. Great job!

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Week

Spaceship Boy

I love how your story takes place in a fictional world, but it has elements of real-life such as a space station similar to that of a plane. The age of a robot kid is a little confusing. If it is to show him growing up around the space station, I think it would be clearer to show him as a baby with maybe a spaceship in the background. I love how the dad looks in the beginning. Setting a description of the character before heading into the meat of the setting, being when he finds the vent, allows the audience to feel as though they have taken a journey with truly understanding the character and where he is coming from.

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Week

Untitled Story Thing (Part 1)

I love your story and how there is a definite build-up to the climax. The pictures are well-drawn, but I wish there were more of them instead of only two throughout the entirety of your narration.

4

Week

A magic story told between friends

I really love your use of sound effects! This story feels like an adventure, and your use of colors is appropriate. Great work!

4

Week

Gibby's story

I love the name of your character! You really allow the audience to feel a relatable connection with Gibby, which makes the ending even more memorable. Great work!

4

Week

Juan Jose Singh's Friends

I really liked the moral of your story and your drawings. It was clear that your character had a purpose. I would like to see more pain from your character when he realizes what the people are using him for.

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Fragments (Molly) Storyboard

Your story is really inspiring and I love your drawing style! It was unclear to me why the murderer was still at the scene for a long time after her parents had been killed. I love how you allow the audience to connect and feel for Molly. This plot is really well done and I look forward to seeing your final product!

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Antonius Story Spine

I really love your story and your illustrations. The video flowed smoothly, and I enjoyed how the plot kept me drawn into what is going to happen next. I can't wait to see the finished product!

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