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The Lonely Fish

Love the use of music. very happy with the ending. Its sad to be lonely, but great way to end the story. Gives everyone hope!

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The Robot That Wanders

sorry what I meant is- I love the moral of the story and even if it wasn't a happy ending- it is a good message and causes us viewers to want to take action. sorry it wasn't a happy ending lol but it was a good ending because of a good message. - correcting my typo at the beginning of this comment

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The Robot That Wanders

Love how the story ends. What a happy ending. Good story and very clear. I dont have any questions at this time, but it really made me "FEEL" emotions. I felt sad for the robot , then I felt happy when he was found. And then when the robot was at the cliff deciding to push the owner off the cliff. I also felt mad about the robot being treated that way but was hoping he wasn't going to push the owner off because thats sad ending. But love your message! GOOD JOB!

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Flora and Fauna

good drawings I love it! you did well on the voice acting and the pics. love it keep up the good work.

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Story Xperiential Week 7 Submission

ITS great!, you did well!! I love the drawing.

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Finley's Story Acts 1,2, &3

Nice story!, it was great! love it keep it up!!

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Act 1 2 and 3

I love the story you did, it was great. keep it up!

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Benjamin's Story

I love this story you did it was wonderful, keep it up. and I like the story you did. it was beautiful.

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TJ's Desire Act 1

Thanks for your feedback. Definitely we agree. it is incomplete because this is only ACT 1. Return for full story. I don't think any ones story would be complete with only Act 1.

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TJ's Desire Act 1

We so appreciate your feedback. We actually go into more depth in Act 2! We didn't want to give away too much of the story. Thanks so much for your comment! Mahalo

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TJ's Desire Act 1

Oh we love your feedback! We actually answer your questions in Act 2! We didn't want to give anything away just yet. Thanks so much for your feedback. WE appreciate it Mahalo!

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TJ's Desire Act 1

Mila, thank you for your response. As we appreciate your feedback, we didn't want to give away the whole story. WE are so glad you commented and asked that question. WE answer it in Act 2! Mahalo!

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TJs Desire

Great feedback, we appreciate it! In the beginning we introduce our character as Trejana but she likes to be called TJ. At the end we reveal that she accepts herself for who she is- Trejana- her first name.

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Derek story board

I love it!! you did well telling the moral story it fits well.keep up the good work.

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Julio's Storyline

I Leo the art style you did great keep it up.

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Week 4 - Benny’s Adventures

I really love the design you did on this story. good job:D

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Salacia

you did well, but was confused on some things. but great job.

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Ted's Story Spine

I like about this story is it tells a lot. nd its a good idea.

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TJs Desire

This is a great response. WE tried to keep it simple but not to leave out too much detail. We will use your feedback to better out story.

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TJs Desire

Aiden we appreciate your comment. This made us think for a bit. We did go back and forth about it but we came to the conclusion that she was the main character and to emphasize her character, we wanted to make everyone else not as noticeable or outstanding like her. But we thank you for this comment. We will use your feedback as we advance in our project.

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Jonas

what I like about this character, he's very much scared of humans. he's much of an cute monster but kinda feel bad he have to deal with such big noises.

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Brandon Bushwick

what I like about this character, is that he's not really used to being in the light.

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Taima

Love hearing about your character. When we see the "What If" projects, it gets us curious wanting to know more. You gave such a great description and also like learning about how he can only control lightning. Good stuff! To me, it was pretty clear. I don't have suggestions at this time.

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Grimmhilda- Intro

Very Creative, it got me thinking and curious about why your characters limbs fall off. I also like how its in the first person. To make it stronger, I would explain why her limbs fall off- however it does leave us curious as to "why"?

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Character Profile

I like your description of your character. Wow, great pictures to go along with the storyline.

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