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Labracadabrador

Thank you! I was inspired by my two cockapoos!

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Final submission

I like the general idea, I'd keep working on it after the course!

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Bubble Pop

I absolutely love your style of visual storytelling, you can really feel the uniqueness of the story through the visuals! The wholesome message is great too. Well done!

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Wolf and Dragon

I've loved watching this story develop over the weeks, and heartfelt the final reel ended up being. A unique spin on a fish-out-of-water/orphan story!

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Dream Seller

I really like the moral of the story, and how the trauma is represented by a dragon/fantasy beast, and gets smaller. I think the character arc is satisfying too! Well done!

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Old Dogs New Tricks Acts 1-3

Thank you for the feedback! So when Oscar swaps, my plan has his dog body getting the 'soul' of the inanimate teddy, so essentially sits there rigid in a teddy bear position. I intend to establish this as a gag when he first switches in my final version. Thanks again!

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Old Dogs New Tricks Acts 1-3

Thank you for your feedback! It was always a swap, I just didn't have time to draw the 'swapped' dog body, but I'll make sure to make that clear in the final reel! Same with the ending/moral, it's meant to be about adapting to the new family role, but can see how that can get lost in translation with this version. Thanks again!

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The Little Apprentice - Act Two

I actually really love the pacing of this video, even if this was only in order to explain what you hadn't drawn, I feel the fast pace/editing made everything feel more exciting, so could be something to consider for the final project if you haven't already! well done for getting something made during your week! :)

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Mr. Charcoal in Recovery-land

Hello, I really liked the tornado representing the burnout! The end of this act also left me wanting more, wondering where the horse will lead Mr Charcoal. Well done!

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Old Dogs New Tricks Act 1

Thank you for your feedback, the puppy will be a lot more involved in acts 2 and 3!

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Skyfellers - Act I

I love the world-building, I think Chusetts makes for a good fantasy location, it reminds me of Berk from How To Train Your Dragon. I think the characters really compliment each other too. I personally think the story could be improved if there was a bigger inciting incident, but I do think this is a solid act that makes me want to watch on anyway.

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Upside Down To Right Side Up - Act 1

Iris being upside down is such a unique trait, it makes her (and the story) stand out! I think there's a lot of potential for comedy too, with differences in how Iris has to live her life to not float away/drop things etc. I do wonder how she became permanently upside down, and how exactly she finds out about the Saturn stone.

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Old Dogs New Tricks Act 1

Thank you for your feedback! I'm glad you thought the body swap wasn't the right choice, it was always intended to be the foolish decision!

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Old Dogs New Tricks Act 1

Thank you for your feedback! I hadn't thought too much about the origins of the magic, as it very much takes a backseat, and the story becomes more about the characters, obviously excluding the body swap. I plan for the story to end with Oscar teaching Yogi a trick to essentially show how the two have warmed to one another though!

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Smoke Me - Act One

I really like how act one is presented as the beginning of a love story, it definitely makes it easier to relate to the cigarette! It definitely intrigued me to see where the story will go moving forward!

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Story Spizzine

I really like the conflict between the two characters? I would perhaps suggest either making Talia the main protagonist we follow from the beginning, or give Craig a bigger philosophical conflict, as while Talia has a satisfying arc, we don't get as much time with her! Perhaps Craig is the one who shuts her out, as he's used to living by himself? Overall I do like the character arc, and think the visuals/setting make the story feel more vibrant :)

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Old Dog New Tricks Story Spine

Hello Colin, thank you for your feedback! You were pretty spot on, Yogi is the house guest, basically the status quo is that every year, Oscar's (human) extended family visit to watch the fireworks outside, and Grandpa's job is to look after Oscar inside, as the family think he'd be scared, so basically Oscar and Grandpa have bonded through many years of being alone together during the new year's celebrations, except this year, Grandpa is also looking after Yogi, so it's no longer jusy Grandpa and Oscar alone in the house, which is why Oscar gets jealous. Majority of the story is just Yogi, Oscar and Grandpa. I'll make sure to fully establish this in future drafts!

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Old Dog New Tricks Story Spine

Thank you for your feedback! I don't plan to focus too much on establishing lore/origins of Oscar's powers, but I do intend to finish the story with Yogi (puppy) learning a tiny bit of magic to establish Oscar's role as the older relative passing down knowledge if that makes sense?

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Old Dog New Tricks Story Spine

Of course, I'll also post them below. I apologise, and will remember to add captions/the script from here on out!
Once upon a time - There was an old labrador named Oscar, who secretly practiced magic.
Every year - on New Year’s Eve, Oscar would watch the fireworks from inside the house with his human-grandpa, while the rest of the humans celebrated outside.
Until one year - Oscar’s human Aunt brought her new puppy, Yogi, to the party, who stole the attention of everyone, including Grandpa.
Because of that - Oscar, jealous of the attention, attempted to use his magic to swap bodies with Yogi while Grandpa slept, but accidentally ended up in the body of his teddy bear.
Because of that- Oscar tried to reach his dog body to switch back before midnight, but was ultimately unable to distract Yogi long enough to escape.
Because of that - Yogi got scared of the fireworks and hid under the bed, clutching Oscar. This reminded Oscar of his puppy days, when he too was scared of the fireworks, but Grandpa would console him, putting on music to drown out the fireworks.
Finally… Oscar made his way back to the music player, and switched it on to wake Grandpa. He switched back into his dog body while Grandpa comforted Yogi. To Oscar’s surprise, Grandpa still invited him for a dance, reminding him that he’s still loved.
Ever since that day - Oscar has gotten on well with Yogi, now seeing himself in the young pup, and confident that he won’t be forgotten.
The moral of the story is that family will always be there for you, even if your role within the household changes.

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Old Dog New Tricks Story Spine

Thank you for your feedback! The urgency for why Oscar wanted to turn back before midnight was so that he can watch the fireworks with Grandad at midnight, I'll definitely work to convey that more clearly! My intention for that was so that he initially fails his task (then the fireworks scare Yogi), and then he realises that his 'want' was quite trivial/less important compared to passing on his knowledge/comforting Yogi! Thanks again!

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Good Spirits

I really like the parallels in this story, with the other spirits controling Bailey, and Bailey controling the birds. I find myself curious about how the human feels after being freed for the first time, so would enjoy an exploration from his point of view. I also think establishing the humans' thoughts on the control early on could make their eventual freedom more impactful. Overall I enjoyed the story!

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Leo finds aliens! And friends.

I really like how the story focuses on Leo, despite the inciting incident seeming very sci-fi! I personally think the story could be improved if early on it is firmly established that Leo struggles with public speaking/anxiety/making friends etc, so we feel the gravity of him opening himself up, and being rewarded with friends. Overall I love the wholesome idea!

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Story Spine

Hello, I think the general structure of the story is there, but it is a little hard to tell what works and what doesn't without a more specific story spine. What are her dreams? Why do we, the audience, want her to succeed? Is she relatable? What's the setback?I do like how there are definitely three acts that seem to feel distinct.

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Worked Like A Dog - Story Spine

This concept reminds me of Turning Red, in the best way, of course! I really like the story, and how the message is to be happy. I do feel for Collie, and I personally think the story could be improved if she earned a job that had been set up before as a final win, e.g maybe one of her coffee shop customers is an agent for the festival artists, and she really wants to be a singer/background dancer, and the agent notices her again at the festival? Overall I think the story works well, and has a nice message!

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"Bad Timing" Story Outline

I love this story, especially the angle of her going back through time to make her mistakes again! I personally think an improvement would be if Leslie loses the ability to time-travel is completely and actively on her, eg she travels too much and it overheats/she tries to show off in the past and breaks the device playing tennis/she corrects every single mistake and returns to the present job done. Overall I love the concept, and think Leslie could be an incredibly relatable character!

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