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The Tale of Marin

This story is so beautiful! I know this is also a storyreel but I feel you’ve done the job of demonstrating us the characters happiness and distress perfectly. I also like the touch of giving your main character blue eyes to demonstrate the power, it also gives a dynamism to the character. I wouldn’t change anything to your story, i think it’s very straightforward. I would only add that maybe, when the main character is sitting as an old lady talking to the lady walking, you could transform her or make a notice to say that she was the one who had given them the spell. Maybe a change of hair? Or eyes? Or maybe transforming themselves. Overall, i think this is such a great story!! Congratulations!!

8

Week

2 Worlds Colliding

Hey! I like the premise of the story! For the way it ended, I can imagine this was only act 1. Considering that this was a project made by a team, I imagine some people had a little trouble downloading the pictures as some of them seem to be blurry. I also liked the music that you chose, as it gives the fantasy vibe since the beginning. Hope you get to develop your story further!

8

Week

Lookin' Lucky

I feel that by the slogan “better to be lucky than smart”, you were going to upload the whole story reel, but for what I’m seeing, this is only the act 1. However, I like the use of sounds and colors. I would love to be able to capture your main character a little better, as sometimes it gave the feeling that i was only looking at scribbles. Understanding the dynamic you want to do, I get why you made your drawing that way but I feel that we need to be able to see the figure a little bit more clearly to understand what’s happening. I hope you get to continue your following acts!

8

Week

Pip's Future Selves!

This was such a good story! I think that we’ve all been Pip, wether that was choosing a major, a masters, a job or a hobby. I really like how you didn’t indicate which major he ended up choosing, as it gives a sense that you don’t have to choose just one version of yourself. The only thing I would adjust would be the music used in the act 2, as it gave away a feeling of terror, Maybe a song a little upbeat would have worked? A song that represents anguish but it’s not too sad. I would love to see this story as an actual short film!! I think it would be of great impact for kids who are going through the same thing.

8

Week

Kahlani: A Fish Out of Water

Hey! I really like the story you’ve developed. I would have loved to see a little of the relationship between Kahlani and Peter to understand that they, at the beginning, didn’t like each other as they didn’t know how to work as a team. Developing the “friend-enemies” relationship at the beginning would make it seem understandable that their relationship is a little difficult. I would say that I feel there’s a lot going on during the “because of that” which makes it a bit difficult to follow it up in which are the morals and what’s happening. Nevertheless, I like the overall sense of the story and the way you’ve created the storyline of friendship and the importance of understanding themselves.

8

Week

The Event

Hello! I agree with Manuela. Really like the drawing style that you’ve chosen, and the sound editing really makes you feel you’re there with them. If it was a mistake, I hope you get to upload it in the future. If not, I really hope you can develop it further after the program is over :)

7

Week

+act 3

Hey!I really like the drawings for the storyboard, I feel they make the story flow really good! One thing I’m not sure about is on the creature. Maybe you could add up a sign about magic or fantasy at the beginning? And also maybe explain a little bit forward the relationship with the world and the weird things that had been happening on set. Can-t wait to see the final storyreel!

7

Week

Croxi - Act 1, 2 and 3

I found your story on Week 6 and I’ve become hook-ed! (You get it! Lol) The illustrations and the way you created the storyboard works perfectly! I feel that the way you’ve created the story has flowed amazingly. I even love the storyreel without any music (I do believe that the story works really well without any dialogue included so maybe you should only work with music for the storyreel). Hope to see your storyreel completed in the next week, so excited!

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Week

Samson the magical Sword - Storyreel

I really like the character arc and growth of both, the sword and the girl. I love it when we are shown two different personalities but the same goal in a story. I don’t think you need to add more about the magic system, the vibes of the story reminds me of The Sword in the Stone, so even though the stories are not similar, I feel that the way you’ve drawn the characters gives the sense of magic in the place. Good job!!

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Week

Wolf and Dragon- Acts 1, 2, & 3- Kayla Stith

I love love love this story and the illustrations! The work you’ve done could work perfectly as a storyboard artist :) I really don’t see what I could add up to the story. I feel you’ve done a pretty good job showcasing the backstory without having to add up too much to the story, and the difference in personalities also makes it resonate more as a family. Good job!!

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ELIXIR - STORY SPINE

WOOW! This story is so filled with fantasy and adventure! I would love to see this story n a bigger format someday, as I feel it has so much potential to develop the background story and the characters. The illustrations are also amazing and well-detailed :) I just wonder how and why does PAPA knows so much about stories about magic swords and elixirs of life. I’d be interesting if it could be further explained

7

Week

Por las barbas de mi gato - My cat´s whiskers

This is so fun! I really liked this story :) I believe that you could use maybe just one scene that represents his fear of cats and his allergic reactions at the beginning, maybe someone is bothering him? That way, the story starts right away without much background story. I feel the story has so much potential! I just think that maybe there-s a lot more information than we need to know but I think that by adding one or two scenes that represent his fear and his status at school could set up the whole story better! I’m really excited to see the whole storyreel put together!! Also, the illustrations are so cool!!!

6

Week

Sebas and Mau (Act 1 and 2 )

Aww this is such a sweet story! And I think it represents way too much a relationship with siblings, more at the age where one wants to play all the time with the other, while the other one is discovering things about themselves. I would like to see the mess that Mau did with the milk earlier, to understand how he had made himself space to add more baking powder. But other than that, I see the story really well developed!

6

Week

Act 1 & 2 Storyreel

This story is so great! I was very surprised to see the magic element in the middle of the story. I think it’d work, or flow, a little bit better if rather than introducing the magic system at the beginning, you could introduce the main character as maybe a “Wanna-be witch” or did something magic related at the beginning. Maybe the mom gives her an amnulet that reveals to have some magic? I’m not sure. However, I like the process of the whole story.

6

Week

Lily the Lion Cub Act1&2

Awww I love Lily! She looks so sweet and I love that she looked positive even though she was hurt when she was a baby. I have not much to say about the story, other than I really want to see Lily practice and develop herself as an amazing skater!

6

Week

Bean. Act 1 and 2

I love Bean so much! I think you’ve done an incredible job to make the story more concise and to the point, giving us fair hints about the character and the story behind it. Good job!!

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Croxi - Act 1 and 2

I can-t believe what you’ve been able to accomplish without any type of audio! The story itself is really well done and immersive. Even without any music, i can feel i know both of the characters personalities and their relationship. And the expressions of the people at their surrounding, even though i didnt hear them, it was so interesting how much of a personality and storytelling you put into this story reel! I would just wonder if you could maybe add some winkles in the mom as at the beginning i thought it was a different kind of relationship, maybe because the daughter looks older than the mom!

6

Week

Samson the scared sword - Act 1 and Act 2

I love the story! And I’m so glad I’ve been able to follow the process of it. As always, I feel the main theme is really interesting and I’m glad you’re being able to develop both character’s personalities. It makes me more interested about what’s happening to both of them. I also feel that the plot with the girl is even more clear than before! I’m wondering if before the sword was unable to stop the people that were wielding him before o he wouldn’t kill, or if he would annoy them into not doing it. I think that part is still a bit unclear for me.

5

Week

Act One

The story is really interesting! I wish I could have had more visuals about what was happening through the story, as of right now I’m not sure if the main character is a zombie, if she’s painted, or more about it. Hope to see it more developed in the final storyreel!!

5

Week

Skyfellers - Act I

I really like the story! It's very dinamic. I would like to know a bit more of a context of the relationship between the world and the dragons to have a better sense of the personality of the kids.

5

Week

Act One Storyreel

Such a great story! I like the idea that Toro confuses being cool with being egocentric, which I believe happens in the real world. I think it would be nice if there was a bigger difference between the place where the other rocks are vs Toro. Maybe the rocks can be at the end of the fall and Toro learns to appreciate the view from down there?

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Week

Act 1

I really like the main character! I feel her story can be very relatable for so many people. However, I wonder a bit what her main goal or obstacle is. I feel it could be better represented in the act 1 but overall, the story flows very nicely!

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Week

Wolf and Dragon- Act 1- Kayla Stith

First of all, the drawings are SO nice! I love the emotions you included into this story and how you portrayed them so nicely. I feel act 1 is very clear. You can see how it will develop and I feel it's very nice how you gave them two personalities so different!

5

Week

Act 1 Storyreel

Oh I really like this story! It's very interesting to see how the dinasour world collides with the real one. I'm wondering how the dinosaurs got to be in space, to be able to contrast the different between the past and the future better. However, I really like the premise!

5

Week

The Magical Sword to afraid to fight - Act 1 Minor beats

I love this story so much! I really appreciated how much effort you put into this Storyreel as it gives you a real clarity on what's happening and the emotions of everybody involved. This story ends up in such a high note that I feel that the second act can be whatever you can imagine. It'd be nice to maybe have a hint of the problematic in this act!

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