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I think the art style for each idea are so unique. Each of your team's ideas are creative and have a totally different tone that helps them stand out. This will be a hard decision in choosing which story to go with for the character assignment. I am fascinated by the creepy halloween idea, it has potential to go in so many directions for character growth. Great job Team Felix

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Hey Wes, thanks for the feedback it has really helped. You are right, the superhero idea seems right now that is feels more like a short skit. I will try my best to expand upon this idea with your comment in mind. I appreciate the comments and questions you make for the Snow globe.

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Hey Emmanuel, Thanks for the feedback. I am glad you like the idea. Your suggestions have really helped me in my decision making for the story. I think you are 100% right that it would be cool to explore the complicated lives of these two in a world where they are viewed as almost god like. These are great points you make, thank you.

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Great ideas all around. They each have a sense of humor and I really like the tone. Your team peaked my interests in only 18 seconds. The first idea about the Proton is something I never would have thought about. If you decide to go with that story, what will be the defining characteristics for the proton? Why does he want to be different? What's so bad about being a proton? Can't wait to see more from you guys.

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Wallflower

This "What if" prompt is very fleshed out and I can see your team put a lot of work into the concept. Although, I feel you could have summarized the idea in fewer words for this assignment. I hope to see how you decide to develop the character of the girl. What will her internal characteristics be like? Looking forward to seeing more from this story. Great idea!

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What If? Ideas by Tiphereth Banks

I think the cats and skateboard idea is sounds like a really fun idea. If you plan to use the cat idea, what direction will you decide to take this story in? Will the main character be a cat who learns to skate by watching humans, or is it a world where cats riding skateboards in common. I do think the last idea is creative but I wonder how you could explore this concept in a short story. Great visuals by the way.

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I like first two ideas about the astronaut and the town of snow people. Each have numerous possibilities to expand on. With the first one is obviously is a romantic sounding story and the character developing for a story like that seems fun. It would be great to know what the astronaut is doing away from home and how his marriage can handle it. Nice ideas all around.

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I really like the idea about the buying and selling dreams. The image you provided for the prompt is a great visual. In the drawing, I find it interesting that you provided a price for each and made the nightmares the cheapest. How do you plan to create a reason behind the prices or who even sells the dreams. I am looking forward to seeing how you develop this story.

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