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Forest people

It was very hard to understand/picture the story while reading it since there are not many images or a narrative voice. I had to read three times and I still don't get the picture. I also would suggest adding the names of the characters. Keep it up team!

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Samson, the magical sword.

This story is one of my two favorite stories out of all. Great story and drawings. Can't wait to see more of the story as it develops.

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SMOKE ME

One of my two favorite stories, maybe my favorite :). Very inspiring story and great drawings and music.

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Wolf and Dragon

Beautiful Story. Great drawings and very exciting to watch.

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love

Music was excellent. I would love to see more of the love story through your animation. Illustration was good.

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Sam and Bailey

Very creative storytelling through Poetry. Images worked well with the narrative and voice was excellent. Great job.

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Eternal Jade

Weird story/ in a good way. Story was clear. Great illustration and the narrative voice was excellent.

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Mixiote and Lili

Love the idea of understanding animal conversations simple illustration worked well for each scene. Seems that the story is in progress and that's why at this stage it's still unclear what the story will be about.

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Underwoof goes under the sea

Simple drawings and clear/great story. I can related to the story. US an México, the two countries I call 'HOME.' Vey beautiful. I was hoping to see the 'new Luanna' meet with the other dogs from the beginning of your story but not really necessary. Great job.

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Lenny and the Song of the Forest

I really loved the animation style. Great story, very touching to the heart. The music was excellent too.

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Mush's Story Spine

I love Mush and your story. My interpretation is that after Mush ripped the flower, he saw himself as one of the petals, de-attached from a beautiful flower. He had cut off himself from a beautiful mushroom family/community and realizes that others have been there for him. But perhaps he thinks different from the rest of them and wants to explore the world and find treasures, how can he still follow his dreams? Maybe he will try to convince others to think like him and go in a journey with him. I am very invested in you story. Love to see how it will develop.

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Gravity

Great story. I can relate to your story, in situations where I had to choose between hanging with my friends and doing something I wanted to do real bad or to accompany one of my brothers in something that was very important for them as well. The story is clear and love your characters as well. I would like to hear more about Rylands feelings been hurt. I was very invested in your story. Great job!

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ECHO

Thank you Maranda. There is a dark world and full of shadow beings like Echo. Elder shadows rule in the dark world and they believe that there is a higher being, the God of all dark creatures, who has created each one of them to a human being to look after. These shadow beings can communicate with each other mostly at night time, when it's dark.
Drawings were made with charcoal and graphite.

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Samson, the magical sword afraid to fight

Very great visuals. Love the story so far and that his new owner is a little girl. I am wondering if finally is in a world where a sward is not needed for deadly battle and if and if he finally feels loved and at last, this will make him stand up for his new master when needed. I see lots of potential and love this sward character!

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Soulmate

I was thinking the machine would find a soulmate for Rasmus, but NO. This story makes me think that in these times of advanced technology, we depend so much on our devices and their information and we don't allow ourselves to learn by exploring the world ourselves. I am happy to think that this character, Rasmus, will learn to seek his destiny and not accept what a machine dictates. Great job!

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What if the dinasour are back

Dinosaurs only have returned home to be hunted down by the human savages. Wonder if they would end up using their fury to defend themselves from these violent humans? Will Rex succeed in his attempt to communicate with humans through his telepathic powers and bring peace once more?

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What if the dinasour are back

They have returned home only to be hunted down by human savages. This is very different and I am very interested to see where this goes. Will at any point of your story, where dinosaurs have to use their fury to survive from humans? Will Rex succeed with his attempt in communicating with humans?

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Mel the Bee

Mel is the only normal bee and others have always been doing things the traditional way that all they needed was some big creature to claim to be their queen bee, and since they've never seen a bear before, they fell for it. Just trying to make some sense to your story logic. Love your character Mel.

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Meet Naila

Yes! Very relatable character to many, which is great. I also had struggled trying to fit in when I was younger but learned that life is much easier and enjoyable by being myself. Of course, each individual's experiences are different. I would like to know more about Naila. Where is Naila from? Does she miss her home country? Was she excited to come to a new country?

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Meet Isabella

I love Isabella's character. It was very interesting to hear her talk and see all her facial expressions. I feel like I've met her before, meaning I have run across people like her and I've been left wanting to know more about them. I hope this time I will get to know Isabella, where her insecurities are coming from, what kind of people have disappointed her. Can't wait to here more from Isabella. Great character!

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Meet Ms. Nguyen

Love this story already. Even though she is an imposter, I feel she will be having a difficult time to get the energy she needs and might end up focusing in helping her students and actually caring for them. Well, I really want to see how this story will develop. Great job team!

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ECHO

Thank you all for your comments, suggestions and questions about Echo. Some additional descriptions have been added to explain a little more about these 'shadow beings.'

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Allison's Three What If's

Hello team Allison! My favorite one is the third one about three baby aliens. I wonder what the person who ends up with the alien babies is thinking. I want to know what his everyday life situation is to understand the kind of decision he will make with these alien babies. Will he make the best decisions?

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What if you could only see your best friend once a year...

All your 'What ifs' are great! my favorite two are the first and last ones.

Wonder if the two best friends knew each other and spent much time together before being in this situations. When they communicate/see each other once a year... Is this it for one day? for one week? for one month?

The everyday life traps... who sets these traps? The government, people not trusting each other no more and they set these to protect their families from others and just got out of control. How did it come to this situation?

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What If?

Hello Yearbook Fam. To me, the first ideo of the world stop spinning is what got my attention. I was asking myself, what would government reactions be if they were in the the side that benefit from the most sunlight all year long; Are they gonna want to prevent people from all over to migrate to their countries building walls to avoid chaos.

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