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Kahlani's Story Progress

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This is the progress I have so far on my story about Kahlani.
She is a mermaid who has never seen the ocean trying to find where she belongs. In act one Kahlani is introduced (her name means of land and water,) and her desire to find a place she belongs is established in her everyday life. Then she meets Peter who offers to take her to her people and the ocean.

In act two, they get in trouble and they have to learn to trust each other and accept help to get out of it. A very strong bond forms between them as they deal with other travel troubles. This makes it doubly hard when Peter all the sudden gets very mean and physically prevents her from continuing her journey. When she runs away, she is caught by pirates and taken to their lair. There, she discovers that Peter is really a pirate who's intention was to capture her the whole time. This is her low point physically, where she is closer to the ocean than ever before, only to be taken farther away permanently, as well as her fear of being helpless has come true in the worst way. This is also her low point internally, since she has lost the only home she had, the hope for one in the future, as well as she has lost her only friend left.

In the third act, Peter sacrifices the only thing he wanted to save her, and she sacrifices what she wants to save him, and together they defeat the captain. Even though they have a stronger bond now than before, he encourages her to go find what she is looking for. She finds the mermaids and they are everything she ever hoped, except for one thing. The sense that she belongs, that she is her true self to the fullest, and that she is where she is supposed to be. With the help from a friend, she realizes that that feeling doesn't come from being somewhere, but by being with the people she loves. She happily reunites with Peter and along with his new crew they set out on epic adventures and helping people wherever they can along the way.

P.S. They visit her land home and her ocean home often. =)

I am still trying to figure out the ending, specifically the moral of the story. It started out as one thing, but has changed as I go along, and so now I'm trying to discover what the real moral is. I would greatly appreciate any ideas or suggestions anyone has to make it a better story. Thank you =)

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Knights of Allegory
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